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Write a Story with Me Part 28 – Oh Snap! Who is that? by Julie Catherine

Yay!  It’s Write a Story with Me day!

Two weeks ago we left Janelle the Fae Queen while getting help to our poor Mommy in labor. Then we left them to be thrown back into the heat of battle with a huge cliffhanger!  Is Daddy dead?  Let’s see if we can find out!

28 – Julie Catherine Vigna – Battle String

She couldn’t tear her eyes away; willed the rust of bile down while bitter tears singed her hair as it whipped across her cheeks. Helpless and terrified, she watched the rain of bodies as they cascaded around her, desperately trying to keep her focus on the one that was her father. Something landed with a thump on the bed and bounced off.

Marci craned her neck towards the movement, just in time to see the hand gripping the bedrail. Unable to help herself she stared in horrified fascination, her heart thudding with pain and fear. Marci’s relief was palpable as Bethany’s toque appeared over the edge of the rail and she hauled herself up, battling against the strong winds that buffeted them both.

“Marci, you’re alive Thank God!” Bethany crawled towards her sister and frantically loosened the knots that tied her sister into the bed. Her eyes were huge and wild with fright as she worked feverishly at the bindings. She sobbed, clinging to her sister for reassurance as much as relief. “I am so, so sorry; I never meant you to come to any harm— I swear. Can you ever forgive me for my foolishness?”

Marci didn’t understand what Bethany was saying, but now wasn’t the time to ask questions. She was just happy to have her sister there with her. If they survived there would be time to sort it all out later.  And it was very likely they wouldn’t make it, for the bed was swooping down towards the icy waters at an alarming rate.

A raspy voice whispered in her ear; it sounded familiar, but she couldn’t quite place it. “NOW— JUMP!”

Write a Story with Me is a group endeavor just for the fun of it.  A different writer adds a new 250 words each week.  It is the ultimate Flash Fiction Challenge!

If you’d like to sign up, come on over.  There’s always room for more!

Part One – Jennifer M. Eaton

Part Two – J. Keller Ford

Part Three – Susan Roebuck

Part Four – Elin Gregory

Part Five – Eileen Snyder

Part Six – Mikaela Wire

Part Seven — Vanessa Chapman

Part Eight — Ravena Guron

Part Nine – Vikki Thompson

Part Ten — Susan Rocan mywithershins

Part Eleven — Kate Johnston  AKA 4AMWriter

Part Twelve — Julie Catherine

Part Thirteen — Kai Damian

Part Fourteen — Richard Leonard

Part Fifteen — Sharon Manship

Part Sixteen – Shannon Blue Christensen

Part Seventeen — Bryn Jones

Part Eighteen — Jennifer M. Eaton

Part Nineteen — Shannon Burton

Part Twenty — J.Keller Ford

Part Twenty-One — Susan Roebuck

Part Twenty-Two — Elin Gregory

Part Twenty-Three — Aparnauteur

Part Twenty-Four — Vanessa Chapman

Part Twenty-Five — Ravena Guron

Part Twenty Six — Susan Rocan

Part Twenty Seven — Kate Johnson

Part Twenty Eight — Julie Catherine

Don’t forget to stop by next week to see what happens next.

 Kai Damian —- TAG!  You are “It”

Sunday Snippets Critique Blog Hop!

Sunday_SnippetsOh Yeah!  It’s the very first Sunday Snippets Critique Blog Hop!

In this hop, participants post 250 words of their work in progress to be critiqued.  Then everyone hops around to critique others.  Don’t have a post of your own?  We’d love a critique anyway!  And next time you can sign up yourself (see below)

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Okay… Here’s mine.  This is the first 250-ish words of The First Day of the New Tomorrow.  This is very fresh writing.  I’m only about five pages into the story.  This is a Young Adult Urban Fantasy.

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There just wasn’t enough cover-up in the world. Maya blended in the last dab, concealing the tenth new blemish this week, and it was only Thursday. In her next life, she’d be a Bavarian princess with perfect skin.  Yeah.  That’d be good.

She slipped on her bifocals and brushed a few of her dark bangs over the more hideous zits on her forehead and took stock.  The acne she could cover up, but the ugly glasses?

“I wish I didn’t have to wear these stupid things,” she told her reflection.  It smirked.  Even her reflection thought she looked like a geek.  Great.

Maya spun and headed for the door, but banged her head dead center on the doorframe.  The world blurred around her, and she grabbed the wall for support. “Owe.” Her hand shot to her forehead.  Everything still seemed to be attached.

Blinking, she tried to focus.  On all sides, a fuzzy halo bent and distorted the world into a crazy Picasso painting.  Nauseous, she closed her eyes and slid to the floor.

She couldn’t be sick.  She had to go to school today.  She’d studied her butt off last night and refused to miss that stinking History test.

Maya removed her glasses and rubbed her eyes. Blinking hard, she stared at the toilet bowl until it came into perfect focus. He stomach settled.  Better.  Whew! She slipped on her glasses and tried to stand, but the fuzzy haze came back.

“What the…” She grabbed the counter and pulled off her glasses.

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The Sunday Snippets Critique Blog Hop is on!

Want to join up? Click here for the rules, and leave a comment to have your name added to the list.  The more the merrier!swish swivel squiggle 2

Click on over to these great writers to check out and critique what they’ve posted!

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http://caitlinsternwrites.wordpress.com/

http://ileandrayoung.com

http://wyrmflight.wordpress.com/

http://www.mandyevebarnett.com

http://womanbitesdog.wordpress.com/

http://jennykellerford.wordpress.com

https://jennifermeaton.com/

http://richardleonard.wordpress.com

http://jordannaeast.com

http://letscutthecrap.wordpress.com

http://writerscrash.blogspot.com/2013/01/critique-blog-hop.html?showComment=1359314347792#c7304398839545720473

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Shameless Promotion! Pet Photo Contest! You Gotta Vote

My Little Girl is a finalist in the Still Moments Magazine’s Pet Photo Contest.

Hop on over and vote for your favorite of five.

I’m not gonna tell you which is mine, because that would be cheating.  Vote for who you think is the cutest!

http://stillmomentsezine.blogspot.com/2013/01/pet-phot-contest.html

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Give that Publisher What They Want Dernit! – Keep It simple

I am uber stoker to be able to dig into the wild and crazy brain of someone who is out there doing this crazy publishing stuff professionally. When you read this, you’re gonna want to slap yourself silly, because this is hearing it right from someone who does this for a living. For the next few weeks, we will be delving into the slush pile with professional editor and author Danielle Ackley-McPhail

Here we go…

The Writer’s Toolbox: Give ’Em What They Want! Why Formatting Is Important By Danielle Ackley-McPhail

(Originally published in Allegory Magazine ©2011)

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So far, we’ve discussed that nothing will help your manuscript if the editor in question is not even willing to read it.

We’ve discussed remembering your contact information, and some basics… How to identify yourself, and your manuscript.

Last week we discussed basic formatting.  Now we’ll go into some special stuff.

Keep It Simple

Matters of Style

No matter what I type here there are going to be plenty of examples of publishers that do things different from what I’ve covered. Sometimes that is just a product of their experience or how they were taught. Sometimes it has to do with style guides. You may or may not have heard of these; the most familiar are the AP Style Guide, the Chicago Manual of Style, and Strunk and Whites. Many of these have their roots in print journalism and are meant to unify style for consistency. Basically they are journalists’ grammar and style bibles. Their use is no longer limited to newspapers or magazines. Not only do they guide a writer in matters of style, but they also cover grammar issues that are often confused or lost in depths of time-fogged memory.

Keep it Simple!

Before the time of electronic submissions not listening to this advice was one of the biggest mistakes beginners made. You would laugh your butts off if you had heard some of the stories I have about the manner in which some hopeful authors have submitted their manuscripts. We are talking complete bells and whistles here of the type you would expect from the ad campaign of a major corporation. Everything from fancy, scented paper to puzzle-box packaging, all of it intended to catch the eye and stand out like a psychedelic dream. Unfortunately, all that does is relegate your manuscript to the list of over-drinks stories editors tell.

Things might have changed now that the majority of submissions are handled electronically, but it is still important for you to know that a story should be noticed for the quality of the writing, not the inventiveness or style of its presentation. If you are submitting by conventional mail use plain white or cream bond paper and observe the formatting guidelines I reviewed above; if you are submitting electronically, don’t use fancy type or try to set your manuscript as if it is a finished book; don’t use colored text or insert photographs (unless they are a key point of what you are submitting, such as an academic text or how-to); and don’t add any other bells and whistles you might be considering. Let me be clear: The manuscript should stand on its own merit. If the writing isn’t any good, none of the flash is going to make a difference. What it will do is distract the editor from your work and likely cause them to reject it outright as being unprofessional.

Award-winning author Danielle Ackley-McPhail has worked both sides of the publishing industry for over seventeen years. Currently, she is a project editor and promotions manager for Dark Quest Books.

Her published works include four urban fantasy novels, Yesterday’s Dreams, Tomorrow’s Memories, Today’s Promise, and The Halfling’s Court: A Bad-Ass Faerie Tale. She is also the author of a single-author collection of science fiction stories called A Legacy of Stars, the non-fiction writers guide, The Literary Handyman and is the senior editor of the Bad-Ass Faeries anthology series, Dragon’s Lure, and In An Iron Cage. Her work is included in numerous other anthologies and collections, including Rum and Runestones, Dark Furies, Breach the Hull, So It Begins, By Other Means, No Man’s Land, Space Pirates, Space Horrors, Barbarians at the Jumpgate, and Mermaid 13.

She is a member of the New Jersey Authors Network and Broad Universe, a writer’s organization focusing on promoting the works of women authors in the speculative genres.

Danielle lives somewhere in New Jersey with husband and fellow writer, Mike McPhail, mother-in-law Teresa, and three extremely spoiled cats. She can be found on LiveJournal (damcphail, badassfaeries, darkquestbooks, lit_handyman), Facebook (Danielle Ackley-McPhail), and Twitter (DAckley-McPhail). To learn more about her work, visit http://www.sidhenadaire.com, http://www.literaryhandyman.com, or www.badassfaeries.com.

Website and/or blog www.sidhenadaire.com, http://lit_handyman.livejournal.com, http://damcphail.livejournal.com

Twitter https://twitter.com/#!/DMcPhail

Facebook http://www.facebook.com/#!/danielle.ackleymcphail

Amazon author page   http://www.amazon.com/Danielle-Ackley-McPhail/e/B002GZVZPQ/ref=sr_ntt_srch_lnk_1?qid=1331314265&sr=8-1

Goodreads http://www.goodreads.com/author/show/989939.Danielle_Ackley_McPhail

http://www.badassfaeries.com/

http://www.sidhenadaire.com/

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#Free #ebooks FOR EVERYONE! “A Hint of Frost” by Hailey Edwards #freestuff

Free_Fridays!

Yay!  It’s Freebee Fridays time!

First of all, congrats to last week’s winner Jamie Ayers

You’ve won a free copy of THE ROMANCE NOVEL BOOK CLUB by Kastil Evenshade in PDF format.

If you’d like to find out more about Kastil and the gads of books she’s had published, hop on over to http://kastil.wordpress.com/

PKO_Alien 3 0003387Last week we had half-naked and half-headed men.  What are you going to do to me this week?

Oh, you are going to love this one. 

This week Hailey Edwards is coming over! 

Alien Huh CloseWho?

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Come on!  Wake up and smell the Fantasy.  She’s awesome!

PKO_Alien 3 0003387You think everyone is awesome.

Do you say nice things about me too when I’m not listening?

Umm, yeah, sure I do!  🙂  Trust me.  You’re going to love this one.  Invite her in.  Remember to smile.

Alien SmileAlrighty Fantasy Lady.  Come on in and sit for a spell.  Oh!  Sorry about that ray gun.  I have a blog to take over later.

Okay.  Comfy? Why do you look scared?  So… Who are you and what do you want?

I’m Hailey, and—at this moment—I want a caramel frappe.

PKO_Alien 3 0003387Oh!  I actually like those.

How Yummy!

PKO_Alien 3 0003387Psst, Jennifer, we like the same drink!

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That’s good.  You’re building rapport. 

Keep going!

PKO_Alien 3 0003387Okay… Ms. Edwards… What makes you think you book is good enough to read?  I don’t get this Fantasy stuff.

I won’t say it’s good enough, but it’s different.

Sometimes that makes all the difference.

Alien SmileYes!  Like Blue hair!  Very vogue.

Does anyone have silver faces and beautiful blue hair like me?

Sorry, no.

PKO_Alien 3 0003387No blue hair?

Then why would anyone want to read it?

Why would anyone want to eat chocolate?

It’s pleasurable.

PKO_Alien 3 0003387It’s pleasurable!

That means that lots of things explode!

I’m afraid not.

A few people were decapitated, though.

PKO_Alien 3 0003387That’s a little harsh.  I’ve never decapitated anyone, but I did tie up the curly haired chic that runs this blog once.  That was fun.

Thanks for the reminder. 

I still have burn marks from the ropes. 

PKO_Alien 3 0003387Okay, so other than decapitation what’s your book about?

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Frost is the story of Lourdes and Rhys, who enter into an arranged marriage for the sake of their clans.

Each has something the other wants, and in the process of getting it, they fall in love.

Aided in no small part by fangs, silk, and liberal doses of venom.

Alien Huh CloseDo you know you are the first author on here that hasn’t answered that question like they were reading off the back of their book?  Kudos too you!

Well, thanks.

PKO_Alien 3 0003387You’re right, Jennifer.

I like this one so far.

Me Too! 

Keep interviewing. 

Alien SmileMs. Edwards, Have you ever exploded anything?

I wanted to try the Mentos and Diet Coke geyser because it looked cool.

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Alien SmileOh!  I tried that once!  Don’t do it in Jennifer M. Eaton’s living room though.  She gets mad. Have you ever tried to take over the world?

 I thought about it, but it seemed to take more effort than it was worth. I mean, why not take over an island in the Caribbean instead?

Alien SmileWell, I hadn’t thought of that.  I like islands.  They’re pretty.  So, tell me, Have you ever painted your hair blue?

Painted, no. Speckled it, yes. When painting my daughter’s bedroom ceiling with a sky mural.

Alien SmileOh!  How wonderful!  Blue is a great color!

I do believe we have bonded!

Great! 

Does that mean I can give away a copy of my book?

Alien SmileYes!  As a matter of fact, I think we should give away MANY MANY copies of your book!

What?

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Alien SmileI am going to electro-bolt over to Amazon dot com right now and explode their servers.  Yes!  That will make all copies of “A Hint of Frost” Free until they get a chance to fix it!

Umm, wait…

Too late she’s already gone. 

She’ll make good on that, too. She’s very, umm, tenacious.

If you’d like to get s free copy of A Hint of Frost zip over to Amazon right away before they get their servers up and running.  It’ll be free until their tech crew gets there, or they catch the Little Blue Lady for Mars. Hurry!

Catapult me to Amazon for a free ebook copy of “A Hint of Frost”

Thanks for having me… I think. 

Someone call Amazon and tell them to keep a lookout for a miniature silver woman with blue hair!

Thanks for being a good sport, Hailey!

If you’d like to find out more about Hailey Edwards and her books, hop on over to http://haileyedwards.net/

Are you signed up for the Critique Blog Hop?

If you are signed up for the critique blog hop, click here for the official rules. If you are not on the official list, please make sure that you comment and leave your web address so you can be added.

Here is a pretty badge/button to post on your blog to help everyone find you post so you can get all the critiques you deserve.

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Don’t forget to post by 1:00 AM on Sunday to get the most critiques.

Enjoy!__-)

JenniFer_EatonF

Do you have a minute to click for me? Purty Please?

Yeah Yeah, you know this already… Jack and Jill Volume One released yesterday.  Thanks so much for everyone who picked up a copy!

Jack & Jill, Volume One CoverI now have official links, so if you guys could do me a favor and hit “like” on Amazon for the Paperback Version and the Kindle Version (No, I don’t know why it’s separate either.

Well, I do, but that’s a story for another day.

Also, if you could be a dear and add it to your Goodreads list, that would be just sumptuous.

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And yes, this lovely blue cover has the seal of approval from the Little Blue Lady from Mars.  🙂

Thanks Guys!

It’s Release day for Jack and Jill Volume One!!!!!!!!!!!! How about a giveaway?

It’s finally here! My first solo release Jack and Jill Volume One is now available in print and ebook from fine retailers like Amazon, Barnes and Noble, Createspace, and all those neat places people like to buy books!

AAAAAAAAAAA!

Can I hear an Oh Yeah?

Wahooooo!

Jack & Jill, Volume One CoverSo, if you like your Romance on the sweet side, I hope you’ll take a look and Jack and Jill Volume One.

Here is the link to Amazon

If you don’t like Sweet Romance, no problem, but I’d appreciate a mention to your friends. Referrals are the best publicity!

Also, if you can click a bit for me, that would be great. This is what I mean by this…

Amazon’s rankings are based on “likes” and “tags”. You could help me out just by clicking on a few buttons.

‘Likes’ are a small button right under the title page. “Tags Customers Associated with This Product” are located near the bottom of the page and you are allowed to agree with up to 15 tags there. Believe it or not, when readers search based on tags, it’s not the sales ranking that puts a book to the top, but the number of people who’ve tagged it for that category!! Doing this is completely anonymous!

Some suggested tags for Jack and Jill: Christian Romance; Love and Romance; Contemporary Romance; Romance over Thirty; Dating and Kids; Dating your best friend.

You know what I also need? REVIEWS! If you’d be willing to do a review, I have a few PDF ARCS available. If you are interested, just comment and write “I’d like to review” and I’ll use the randomizer to pick a winner.

Thanks for your help, guys. I really appreciate it!

Oh yeah! I’m being interviewed by the lovely and uber-talented Jocelyn Adams today if you’d like to stop by!

JenniFer_EatonF

Write a Story with Me Part 27- Oh No! He can’t be dead! by Kate Johnson

Yay!  It’s Write a Story with Me day!

Last week Janelle the Fae Queen went to get help to out poor Mommy in labor.

What’s gonna happen? We don’t know because Kate Johnson is throwing us back into the heat of battle!

27 – Kate Johnson – Battle String

A sudden explosion jerked the ship sideways. Marci gripped the sides of her bed, grateful that she had been tied in. A terrible rush of noise filled Marci’s ears, and she gasped in fright. The ship bumped haphazardly, as though damaged, and she felt her stomach drop.

Shouts could be heard from the crew. Marci tried to yell for help, but her voice wouldn’t work. No matter how hard she tried, she was utterly voiceless. She tried hitting her hands on the bed frame, but the deathly shrieking of the engines drowned out any sound her little fists made.

The ship was falling. Falling fast. There was no time to think, hope, pray before the vessel shattered into three parts. Marci, still attached to her bed, sailed into the sky, tumbling toward the water. She cried soundlessly and clutched the bed in desperation. In her blurry daze, she saw the ball of fire that once was the ship. Dark objects dotted the sky before spinning to earth. Marci tried to keep track of something, anything, as she plummeted down. Finally, she realized the objects weren’t just loose shards of the ship.

They were bodies. Dead people falling around her like rain. Her throat clenched.

One of them was her father.

Write a Story with Me is a group endeavor just for the fun of it.  A different writer adds a new 250 words each week.  It is the ultimate Flash Fiction Challenge!

If you’d like to sign up, come on over.  There’s always room for more!

Part One – Jennifer M. Eaton

Part Two – J. Keller Ford

Part Three – Susan Roebuck

Part Four – Elin Gregory

Part Five – Eileen Snyder

Part Six – Mikaela Wire

Part Seven — Vanessa Chapman

Part Eight — Ravena Guron

Part Nine – Vikki Thompson

Part Ten — Susan Rocan mywithershins

Part Eleven — Kate Johnston  AKA 4AMWriter

Part Twelve — Julie Catherine

Part Thirteen — Kai Damian

Part Fourteen — Richard Leonard

Part Fifteen — Sharon Manship

Part Sixteen – Shannon Blue Christensen

Part Seventeen — Bryn Jones

Part Eighteen — Jennifer M. Eaton

Part Nineteen — Shannon Burton

Part Twenty — J.Keller Ford

Part Twenty-One — Susan Roebuck

Part Twenty-Two — Elin Gregory

Part Twenty-Three — Aparnauteur

Part Twenty-Four — Vanessa Chapman

Part Twenty-Five — Ravena Guron

Part Twenty Six — Susan Rocan

Part Twenty Seven — Kate Johnson

Don’t forget to stop by next week to see what happens next.

 Julie Catherine —- TAG!  You are “It”

Why doesn’t this chapter work? The rules of writing a scene.

Have you ever read something you’ve written, and know that it just doesn’t “work” but you can’t figure out why?

I’m currently reading a beta that is in probably its fiftieth draft. That’s okay.  People write at different speeds.  For me personally, I am reading this manuscript for probably the sixth or seventh time.  Each time I read it, I am pleasantly surprised by the “growth” of the story.

Think GirlSo, here’s where the “Why doesn’t this chapter work” comes in.  I am DEVOURING this manuscript this time around.  The added scenes are spot-on.  The story is exciting and driven.  Then BAM!  I hit a roadblock.

I hit a scene that just didn’t satisfy me.  Was it written well?  Yes.  Did it follow the plot?  Yes.  So what was wrong?

I went back to a writing lesson I learned probably a year ago.  It said that each scene needs to be a miniature story in itself.  It has to start, have a rising action, a climax, a falling action, and a resolution.  Now, I am not saying that this needs to be in depth.  Think of it.  A falling action can be as simple as an emotional response of a character shaking their head… but a scene really DOES need to have all these elements.

The problem with this scene is that it didn’t do this.  It was a scattering of information, mostly that I already knew as a reader, and it did not push the story forward.  No, it was not filler.  I just don’t think the author “did what they intended” to do with that scene.

Now, I’m not psychotic.  I am not saying that I look at every scene I write for rising action, climax and resolution, but I think at this point I naturally write this way… as all serious writers should.

So next time a scene is bothering me, and I can’t figure out why, I’m going to dissect it. Does it have a rising action? Climax? Falling action?

Most importantly … is something resolved?

I think that’s the biggie.  If nothing is resolved (however minor) then the scene does not drive the story forward.

What are your thoughts?

_JenniFer____EatoN