Sunday Snippet from my Paranormal Romance Une Variante

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Happy Sunday Snippets!

Today I decided to give you a snippet from a completed novella that I will be sending out to query sometime mid-January.

Une Variante is a Paranormal Romance, and I am really tickled with it.

Now, I am going to admit that I did the random-number thing here, but when I saw where it landed, I had to giggle, and I stepped up two lines just to get the whole scene in.

Yes, leave it to me to include going to the bathroom in a story.  I had a good reason though.  I needed her out of the room, and hey, when you gotta go, you gotta go, right?

Here’s 112 words from Une Variente. Amanda is getting water for another character who has an upset stomach.

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She walked to the powder room and turned on the faucet. As the cup filled, her own stomach gurgled. Maybe the pizza got her, too. She set the cup down and closed the door, readying to do her business.

Amanda’s reflection stared back at her in the mirror, tracing every imperfection in her aging face. Jason was worried about his body, and he was absolutely beautiful…and look at her. So many little lines and a few silver highlights adding to her dark hair’s glow. My God, what does he even see in me? She hit the bathroom fan and flushed the toilet, scrunching her hair with damp fingers after washing her hands.

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So what do you think?  Ever had a character stuck in the can? Do tell. :-)

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8 responses to “Sunday Snippet from my Paranormal Romance Une Variante

  1. Great scene! Nothing wrong with a bathroom scene as far as I’m concerned. :)

    I have put in bathroom scenes before, especially in my first published novel where the maid is explaining how the old-fashioned ‘commode chair’ is more convenient than ‘squatting over a cold chamber pot in the middle of the night’. SInce it’s a time-travel tale, I thought it was important for kids to know how the ‘conveniences’ worked back then! :)

  2. When I’ve got time, I’ll include a snippet on Sundays. But things are a bit rushed just now. I can think of two writers who mention “bathroom breaks” in their works and have commented on how such a necessity is usually left out of books: Piers Anthony and Jasper Fforde. Sometimes it seems like every deeply personal act can be discussed ad nauseum, except using the facilities! (And notice how I even use euphemisms. ;) )

  3. Never had a character stuck in the loo but when I was younger I read a book where the characters got trapped in a tower for a week. The author described everything, but forgot to mention a bathroom :D So it’s always good to know characters are human, because my eight year old brain spent the rest of the book figuring out how they “went.” :)

  4. I like how you take characters any person could related to, and it doesn’t matter what age the reader is in his or her life. You write in a way a reader understands why your character feels down. :)

  5. I left mine on my blog and signed up on your Sunday Snippet page. :-)

    Can’t wait for this one to hit the shelves. It soo cool. :-)