I’m dissecting the article Hunting Down the Pleonasm, by Allen Guthrie, using it as a cattle prod to search for little nasties in my manuscript. Yep, you can join in the fun, too. Let’s take a looksee at topic #27
27: Don’t plant information. How is Donald, your son? I’m quite sure Donald’s father doesn’t need reminding who Donald is. Their relationship is mentioned purely to provide the reader with information.
Ha! If you’ve ever had a beta read done by me, you know I’m a viper when it comes to info-dumps. But I usually tag them when they are paragraphs long.
What Guthrie mentions here is a little more subtle, but it should jump out at you as unrealistic dialog.
Anywhere where you are dropping information in an unnatural way is bad. Also be careful, because you can insert information in a completely logical thought, but then end up going off on a tangent of info-dumping and lose your reader.
Do you have any funny examples of this?