There’s another pitch contests going on. So, I figure, why not?
This one is over at Beyond Words and the prize is a full manuscript read and critique by agent Victoria Marini. Not too shabby. So, of course I am throwing my hat in the ring.
If you want to join in, you need to have a completed manuscript, because if you win, she will be requesting a FULL. Pretty cool.
The contest is for a two-sentence pitch, and the first sentence of your manuscript. Of course, I was ranting about the last one, not liking my first 250 words hanging out there all alone. Now, I am really not liking my first sentence hanging out there all lonely-like. This is the way it all starts, though, so I am going with it. Let’s hear it for the voice of a little boy!
Opening Sentence: Grown-ups fight a lot, Magellan thought, as he looked out over the crowd.
Two Sentence Pitch: A common boy unknowingly imprinted with the dangerous powers of the Great Goddess, shatters the galaxy as he knows it. He travels back in time, hoping to change his destiny, before a jealous prince manipulated by Darkness murders him.
Jennifer M Eaton 
Yea! I’m so glad I could help! I sometimes worry about giving advise like that to someone I’m not all that familiar with. I know that the start of the novel is the hardest part. I’m so glad I could point you in a better direction. I’d love to read the new intro sometime!
Hey Jennifer,
I wanted to say that your comment about my MS, Blackbird, having a gritty feel that didn’t fit the pitch was a HUGE help! I’ve tried many times to get my intro to work, and after your comment, I realized that I needed to start at a different place. Starting somewhere other than the concert gets rid of that “gritty” feel that isn’t really my novel.
Anyway, just wanted to say thanks!