Flash Fiction Friday on Wednesday – Fireworks

Let’s do ten minutes today, since I am totally unprepared. It’s the fourth of July, so let’s think about fireworks. Go!

John’s grip tightened on my wrist as he pulled me up the slope. A tree branch snagged my sweater.

“Slow down,” I shouted.

“Come on,” John laughed. “We’re almost there.”

The dried leaves on the forest floor cracked beneath my sneakers. A cricket chirped in the distance.

“If you could just tell me where we’re going?”

“Then it wouldn’t be a surprise.”

The moonlight cast flickering shadows as the treetops swayed in the breeze. He slowed, and took my hands in his. John’s eyes consumed me. His smile drained any sense of anger over my pulled sweater.

“Are you ready?” he asked.

“For what?”

He gently led me from the trees, to the edge of a precipice. The drop seemed miles below. Twinkling lights and movement and a distant sound of laughter rose from the world beneath us.

“Where are…”

Fireworks (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

A dull thud sounded from below, and a gasp rang out from the distant crowd. A red starburst filled the sky, followed by a yellow. The rattle of the fireworks barraged my ears, but I was too awestruck to notice. They blazed and dazzled before me, as I stared not up— but out.

“John, this is amaz…” I gasped. My fingers covering my lips.

John knelt beside me on one knee, a small box in his hand. His smile sparkled amongst the flashes lighting up his face. “Claire, I have a question for you.”

20 responses to “Flash Fiction Friday on Wednesday – Fireworks”

readinpleasure | July 5, 2012 at 12:33 pm |

really sweet and romantic
Widdershins | July 5, 2012 at 12:58 am |

Awwww … that’s sweet.
Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:50 pm |

So, is anyone going to see fireworks tonight
- Robert Gregory | July 4, 2012 at 6:22 pm |
  
  You know, I want to . . . but I don’t think my twelve pack of beer can get in to the festivities. 😦 lol . . . Dern fascists!
  - Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 9:42 pm |
    
    Ha! As long as you can see them from the backyard, it’s good.
jmmcdowell | July 4, 2012 at 1:21 pm |

So sweet! A great flash for the holiday. 🙂
- Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:52 pm |
  
  Thanks so much!
Pink Ninjabi | July 4, 2012 at 11:52 am |

Simply amazing. Learning to write fiction myself, I have a greater appreciation for clarity like yours and great punctuation. Thank you for sharing. 😀

Pink.
- Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:54 pm |
  
  Great punctuation? I’ve never been accused of that before!
  - Pink Ninjabi | July 6, 2012 at 1:22 am |
    
    LOLOL.. Really, it stood out to me. So clean, clear, and crisp. Yup. I definitely have more appreciation for this now that I’m struggling to get the courage to write fiction myself. Thank you!!
Robert Gregory | July 4, 2012 at 10:53 am |

Aww… Even melts the heart of curmudgeon like myself. 🙂 Very nice,
- Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:54 pm |
  
  Thank you,Robert!
kford2007 | July 4, 2012 at 7:34 am |

How sweet! Love it.
- Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:55 pm |
  
  🙂
Besma at Life Demiraged | July 4, 2012 at 6:57 am |

This gave me an idea. I think I’ll make myself write freely for 10 minutes everyday – timed. Thanks!
- Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:57 pm |
  
  It’s great to get the juices flowing!
Subhan Zein | July 4, 2012 at 12:50 am |

Hi Jennifer

You write good stuff up here, so please keep penning and keep inspiring! 🙂

I would like to thank you for following my blog. I hope my blog doesn’t disappoint you and that your visits in my blog have been and will always be a joyful ride.

Thank you again and I wish you a lovely day! 🙂

Subhan Zein
- Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:58 pm |
  
  Thanks. Nice to have you here!
Julie | July 4, 2012 at 12:40 am |

Love it. So sweet. 🙂
- Jennifer M Eaton | July 4, 2012 at 5:59 pm |
  
  Thanks, Julie!