Someone told me once you can never torture your Main Character too much. Tee Hee. Here are six torturous sentences from my current work: Fire in the Woods.
Pain edged into my brain, peeling back my skull and slicing what it found inside, bearing no mercy or reluctance. I slammed my hands against my ears, but it continued to rasp and carve a hole through my senses. Head pounding, I cried out in agony but my voice was lost, strangled within the slicing rage of noise exploding through my mind. I dropped to my knees, tears streaming down my face.
“Please stop! Make it stop!”
I hope you enjoyed it!
I love the immediate intensity of pain, especially: peeling back my brain. Ouch!
Yup, you just described me with a migraine. 🙂 Great description.
Ha! A lot of people mentioning migraines. Funny, I am a fellow sufferer. Maybe that is where I got the inspiration.
OK, I HAD a migraine today already LOL. Wow, what a description, could feel the pain – great six!
Thank you so much monica!
Want an aspirin?
Oh wow, that is so vivid I may need an aspirin!
I’d need stronger than aspirin but I’m a wimp
Very well-written. How much can a character take? I think sometimes my main characters are stronger than me. Great post!
I would probably passed out
I’m a wimp
Jeez! I hope you feel better soon! 🙂
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OH my but you are sadistic…but in a good way! 😉
I was imagining the lady who cut me off on the way to work
Well, I wouldn’t say “enjoy” was the right word. 😉 But I certainly feel the pain. Well done.
Some people are in to it
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I swear, I think I can hear my main characters in that piece. Oh well, their pain is our entertainment, right? 🙂
Tell them they can come over to my novel and play 🙂
You want to play with my Necromancer? Well, he is hot, and a sweetheart. I’ll suggest it to him. As for Tavis… I think he’s no longer taking my calls after what I did to him at the climax of the last book in his trilogy… Oops. 🙂
Ha! For some reAson I don’t think our characters ever get mad at us
If we do our job right and leave them in a better place at the end of the story, you’re probably right. Maybe Tavis is just sulking because his books are done. 🙂
I can see that being a bumber. You need to think up something else for him to do
Please don’t encourage him to take over my brain again. The ideas that have been waiting their turn will flip and I’ll have a civil war in my brain. It won’t be pretty. Though I do miss him. Often.
Sometimes it’s very hard to let go.