Write a Story with Me – Part 11- Tying up the plot holes with Kate Johnston

Hey! Someone’s paying attention! Special thanks to the wonderfully talented Kate Johnston for noticing a little plot glitch in the story.

There was a discrepancy in the whereabouts of the Olden leaf. In installment 6
and 7, Janosc brings the Olden leaf to Gwydyon. But in Vikki’s passage, Marci
puts the Olden leaf in a pot.

What does a writer do???? Let’s find out with Kate’s installment.

Take it away, Kate!

As Marci hurried to greet her father, she wondered if she was wise to put the Olden leaf in the pot, a gift to her father from the Establishment. She’d been so upset over Janelle’s future that she hadn’t been thinking properly. Their family custom was to concoct Needletea in that pot upon her father’s return from his missions.

Move the leaf, Marci thought. She raced back upstairs and grabbed the leaf. Then she stopped.

This wasn’t the Olden leaf. This one had the wrong shape, and it wasn’t warm to the touch.

Where was the Olden leaf? Where did this ordinary leaf come from?

Marci hunted, but the Olden leaf was gone. Did Janelle take it? No, she wouldn’t have taken it without telling her.

Then where…?

Wanna find out where? Visit 4AMWriter’s blog to find out! Kate’s just getting started! Part Eleven — Kate Johnston

If you’d like to sign up, come on over. There’s always room for more!

Part One – Jennifer M. Eaton

Part Two – J. Keller Ford

Part Three – Susan Roebuck

Part Four – Elin Gregory

Part Five – Eileen Snyder

Part Six – Mikaela Wire

Part Seven — Vanessa Chapman

Part Eight — Ravena Guron

Part Nine – Vikki Thompson

Part Ten — Susan Rocan

Part Eleven — Kate Johnston AKA 4AMWriter

Don’t forget to stop by next week to see what happens next.

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14 responses to “Write a Story with Me – Part 11- Tying up the plot holes with Kate Johnston”

mywithershins | September 12, 2012 at 3:00 pm |

Kate did a great job explaining the leaf! I can’t wait to read the next installment. 🙂
Vanessa Chapman | September 12, 2012 at 9:09 am |

Yes I had spotted that and was glad Kate cleared it up! Nobody should feel bad, it’s inevitable that things like this happen when there are so many contributors. Luckily we have Kate to sort it all out! 🙂
kford2007 | September 12, 2012 at 6:52 am |

but, but, but…the Olden leaf wasn’t a gift to Marci’s dad from the Establishment. It was for Janelle. Marci brought it to her. Oh my. What a quandry once again. 🙂

I LOVE this exercise. Not only do we get to read the awesomeness of other’s writing styles, but we are also training our eyes on catching plot holes, mistakes, etc.. We’re learning to edit the way editors do. Fantastic!
- jmmcdowell | September 12, 2012 at 8:36 am |
  
  I think Kate is saying the pot was the gift to Marci’s father….
  - kford2007 | September 12, 2012 at 9:18 am |
    
    oh…well, that makes sense. I read it the other way around. *facepalm* 🙂
    - Jennifer M Eaton | September 12, 2012 at 9:23 am |
      
      I love that you guys are paying such close attention to detail
    - 4amWriter | September 12, 2012 at 9:29 pm |
      
      No problem! This is only going to get stickier with the more details we have to keep track of. I’m glad we’re keeping each other on our toes. 🙂
  - 4amWriter | September 12, 2012 at 9:28 pm |
    
    Thanks, JM–yes, exactly. I think my sentence is confusing though. I can see where it might be interpreted that the leaf was the gift.
- 4amWriter | September 12, 2012 at 9:27 pm |
  
  No, I meant that the pot was a gift to Marci’s dad. Not the leaf. I think that sentence is a little screwy in its phrasing–but indeed I intended that pot be the gift.
jmmcdowell | September 12, 2012 at 6:17 am |

Catching this slip is just one example of why Kate is an awesome beta reader/critter/editor. 🙂 And on top of that, she’s a great writer!
- 4amWriter | September 12, 2012 at 9:31 pm |
  
  Now it’s my turn to wish for a blushing emoticon, JM. You’re very sweet.
Vikki (The View Outside) | September 12, 2012 at 3:03 am |

Whoops! I read through the previous parts too! *pouts*

Xx
Julie Catherine | September 12, 2012 at 12:49 am |

Awesome! This is so much fun! 🙂
- Julie Catherine | September 16, 2012 at 11:33 am |
  
  Yay, okay, I have my part of the story posted – enjoy! 🙂