Hey! Someone’s paying attention! Special thanks to the wonderfully talented Kate Johnston for noticing a little plot glitch in the story.
There was a discrepancy in the whereabouts of the Olden leaf. In installment 6
and 7, Janosc brings the Olden leaf to Gwydyon. But in Vikki’s passage, Marci
puts the Olden leaf in a pot.
What does a writer do???? Let’s find out with Kate’s installment.
Take it away, Kate!
As Marci hurried to greet her father, she wondered if she was wise to put the Olden leaf in the pot, a gift to her father from the Establishment. She’d been so upset over Janelle’s future that she hadn’t been thinking properly. Their family custom was to concoct Needletea in that pot upon her father’s return from his missions.
Move the leaf, Marci thought. She raced back upstairs and grabbed the leaf. Then she stopped.
This wasn’t the Olden leaf. This one had the wrong shape, and it wasn’t warm to the touch.
Where was the Olden leaf? Where did this ordinary leaf come from?
Marci hunted, but the Olden leaf was gone. Did Janelle take it? No, she wouldn’t have taken it without telling her.
Wanna find out where? Visit 4AMWriter’s blog to find out! Kate’s just getting started! Part Eleven — Kate Johnston
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Part One – Jennifer M. Eaton
Part Two – J. Keller Ford
Part Three – Susan Roebuck
Part Four – Elin Gregory
Part Five – Eileen Snyder
Part Six – Mikaela Wire
Part Seven — Vanessa Chapman
Part Eight — Ravena Guron
Part Nine – Vikki Thompson
Part Ten — Susan Rocan
Part Eleven — Kate Johnston AKA 4AMWriter
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Kate did a great job explaining the leaf! I can’t wait to read the next installment. 🙂
Yes I had spotted that and was glad Kate cleared it up! Nobody should feel bad, it’s inevitable that things like this happen when there are so many contributors. Luckily we have Kate to sort it all out! 🙂
but, but, but…the Olden leaf wasn’t a gift to Marci’s dad from the Establishment. It was for Janelle. Marci brought it to her. Oh my. What a quandry once again. 🙂
I LOVE this exercise. Not only do we get to read the awesomeness of other’s writing styles, but we are also training our eyes on catching plot holes, mistakes, etc.. We’re learning to edit the way editors do. Fantastic!
I think Kate is saying the pot was the gift to Marci’s father….
oh…well, that makes sense. I read it the other way around. *facepalm* 🙂
I love that you guys are paying such close attention to detail
No problem! This is only going to get stickier with the more details we have to keep track of. I’m glad we’re keeping each other on our toes. 🙂
Thanks, JM–yes, exactly. I think my sentence is confusing though. I can see where it might be interpreted that the leaf was the gift.
No, I meant that the pot was a gift to Marci’s dad. Not the leaf. I think that sentence is a little screwy in its phrasing–but indeed I intended that pot be the gift.
Catching this slip is just one example of why Kate is an awesome beta reader/critter/editor. 🙂 And on top of that, she’s a great writer!
Now it’s my turn to wish for a blushing emoticon, JM. You’re very sweet.
Whoops! I read through the previous parts too! *pouts*
Awesome! This is so much fun! 🙂
Yay, okay, I have my part of the story posted – enjoy! 🙂