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Okay… Here’s mine. This is the second 250 words of my new YA Urban Fantasy: “The First Day of the New Tomorrow”. In the First 250 words, Maya is in the bathroom getting ready for school. She put on her glasses, and her vision got blurry.
“What the…” She grabbed the counter and pulled the metal frames from her face. The room slipped into perfect crisp focus again. Three slow breaths calmed her only slightly.
A ray of sunshine poked through the white lace curtain, landing on a towel beside the bathtub. A spider web clung to the ceiling, holding more dust than forgotten prey. Three nails popped through the wall near the door—all normal things, except she could see them clearly—just as clearly as she could see her glasses perched on the counter before her.
“Okayyy…” She lifted the spectacles to her eyes, crinkling her nose as the world blurred before her. She stared at the lenses. “Teenager’s eyesight clears up overnight. News at eleven.” She smiled and slipped the glasses into her pocket. “I’m certainly not complaining.”
She trudged down the stairs and found her mother’s obligatory, “Don’t forget to eat breakfast” note fastened to the refrigerator door—as if she’d even look at the fridge if she weren’t already in breakfast mode.
Rifling past the food savers and soda cans, she sighed. Would a few eggs be too much to ask for? She grabbed the milk and closed the door. Cereal would have to do. Spinning, she pursed her lips, seeing the nearly empty Cheerios container on the counter. Great. Eat breakfast, but I’m not leaving anything for you to eat.
She reopened the refrigerator and startled. Three eggs lay beside last night’s spaghetti sauce, neatly balancing on the wired shelving. How the heck could she have missed them before?
“Okay, eggs it is.”
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