This one made me laugh. There is a point in the Gold Mine manuscript where a secondary lead character finds out that someone is his father. His reaction is “You’re . . . my . . . father?” (minor action element for dramatic effect). “My father?”
What made me laugh is that the publisher said “This immediately bought to mind Star Wars”
For an intro into where these tips are coming from, please see my post: A Full Manuscript Rejection, or a Gold Mine? You can also click “Rant Worthy Topics” in my right navigation bar. Choose “Gold Mine Manuscript” to see all the lessons to date.
Now, I actually did not think “Star Wars” when I read it, but there is another element in this story that has since been removed… My son and I (he also read the manuscript) were talking about this other element, and my husband said: “She stole that from Star Wars!” I was thinking it in the back of my head, but he verbalized it very well.
The problem is, Star Wars is not just a story that was written over thirty years ago. It is a piece of Americana. There are too many people in the USA, and in the world, who have seen Star Wars… even memorized it. You simply CANNOT mess with themes like that anymore, unless you are careful.
Now, is this to say that no person will ever find out about questionable parentage again in literature? No, of course not. However, you need to be VERY CAREFUL when you do it. Like this publisher stated in an earlier post… Find the uniqueness in what is not unique.
You need to make this your own. When they read your tear-jerking scene, they should see only your characters in their minds, not Luke laying on that platform and then falling down the shaft. If an element has been used before, and notably so, work that scene harder than any other scene. Make sure, without a doubt, that the element is now YOURS. Make them forget all about Luke Skywalker.