I’m dissecting the article Hunting Down the Pleonasm, by Allen Guthrie, using it as a cattle prod to search for little nasties in my manuscript. Yep, you can join in the fun, too. Let’s take a looksee at topic #23
23: Don’t allow your fictional characters to speak in sentences. Unless you want them to sound fictional.
Time for all the English teachers to cringe! But it’s true, right? Do we speak in sentences? Well, sometimes. But there should be a good mix of full sentences and fragments. Heck, even an incomplete thought here and there will help make the dialog seem more real.
And if you are not sure if it sounds real or not, read it out loud. Even better… have someone else read it to you. If it sounds weird with a voice attached, then you need a little re-write.
I’m dissecting the article Hunting Down the Pleonasm, by Allen Guthrie, using it as a cattle prod to search for little nasties in my manuscript. Yep, you can join in the fun, too. Let’s take a looksee at topic #4
4: Cut adjectives where possible. See rule 3 (for ‘verb’ read ‘noun’).
Ha! Since I posed it last week, let me do a little cut and paste for you.
3: Use strong nouns in preference to adjectives. I won’t say avoid adjectives, period, because about once every fifty pages they’re okay! What’s not okay is to use an adjectives as an excuse for failing to find the correct noun.
Hmmm. No adjectives? As in NONE? I’m not sure I agree with this, although I have caught myself using TOO MANY from time to time. I mean, you need to describe stuff, right?
Strong nouns? I think maybe he should have re-thought that. I can understand not saying: “The angry dog barked”
What should be said is “The dog lowered his head, baring teeth. His bark echoed through the room”
The second angry dog is much more menacing, and I didn’t use any adjectives. I think he may just be talking about the whole show verses tell issue, because you’re gonna have to describe a few things sooner or later, right?
Open discussion time! What have you found with your writing and adjectives? What do you think Allen Gutrie’s point is? Where do you think adjectives are necessary?
Posted in General Writing Tips, Uncategorized
Tagged Adjective, Adverb, english language, Grammar, how to write a great novel, Literature, Noun, Verb, World Literature, Writing help
Yes, he is reviewing a novel, but WHO CARES!
The Monomaniacal Middle Grade Reviewer goes off on a tangent starting at about 1:05 on how to write a great novel, and then goes in-depth around 1:59 about what makes a good action scene, and then again at 3:35 on how to write a great action scene.
This is probably his best interview EVER.
If you care about a kid’s opinion, this is a great interview to take a look at. I am bookmarking this just to come back and take a look at it once in a while.
I think this kid has a future in reviews. Oh, yeah. The actual novel is Rick Riordan’s Battle of the Labyrinth
Take it away, Dude!
Posted in Book/Movie Review
Tagged Arts, Battle of Labyrinth, Battle of the Labrinth, Book Review, Fiction, Heroes of Olympus, how to write a great action scene, how to write a great novel, Kane Chronicle, Last Olympian, Lightning Thief, Online Writing, Percy Jackson, Percy Jackson & the Olympians, Review, Rick Riordan, Sea of Monsters, Son of Neptune, The Titan's Curse