I need some input. My Bad-guy’s name is “Darkness”. It didn’t really start out that way. Darkness was just something to be afraid of, and then he developed into a person, and the name stuck. I know “Darkness” has been used before. Do you think it’s cliché?
I’ve also been playing with the name “Malice” What do you think?
I’m entering the 50-word synopsis contest in a few days. These are the two versions I came up with, depending on the name.
Darkness has descended upon the galaxy. Magellan Talbot, a poor miner’s son, has been chosen by their Goddess to defeat it. There’s one problem…. a tragic accident has erased Magellan’s memory. If he doesn’t regain it in time, evil will prevail. His task is simple, if he could only remember.
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Malice threatens the galaxy from within. Magellan Talbot, a poor miner’s son, has been chosen by the Goddess to defeat it. There’s one problem…. a tragic accident has erased Magellan’s memory. If he doesn’t regain it in time, evil will prevail. His task is simple, if he could only remember.
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So, which one do you think sounds better?
Jennifer M Eaton 