For the while now I’ve been too lazy to put out my own stuff featuring other authors for Six Sentence Sunday.
Today, I thought I’d take a random Six from my current baby, “Fire in the Woods”.
I basically opened up the file, dragged the little doo-hicky down about a quarter into the document, and counted down ten lines. So, Bam, this is the six you get.
In this six, my main character, Jess, is describing her father. (Fire in the Woods is told in first person “I” from Jess’s perspective.)
“Well, he doesn’t really laugh much anymore. We used to play a lot together, and now he’s like, all business.” I closed my eyes, taking in the clear forest air. My mind wandered back to my mother’s funeral—Dad sitting on the bench, staring at Mom’s open coffin. “He never cried. He just sat there.”
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Wow. I don’t know the rest of the story but this is both sad and powerful. Good pick.
This is so touching. I assume Jess’s father buries himself in work still trying to cope with the grief. That’s so sad. Nice six, Jennifer.
As others have said, you pack a lot of good reading into those six. Given that everything we write is supposed to move the story forward, I think this exercise is a good way to evaluate how well we’re doing. 🙂
Sad six lines and brings back memories, although we never really had a funeral for my mom, just a memorial tea at our house. Still, your six sure brought up some emotion, there. 🙂
Awe–I didn’t mean to make anyone sad but I guess if I did than I did a good job. Sorry
No problem! The key to a good story is to touch your readers, so I guess yo did your job! lol
Very moving work.
A lot captured in those six sentences.
those six caught my attention right off the bat. from the title and to where the dad is sitting in front of the coffin and never cried and just sat there, and to me had a metaphorical implication. though he is just sitting there, inside he is burning up. just a take jenn. hope your saturday is a great one.
Great writing, as always, Jennifer! I enjoy reading your posts so much, and thank you!
powerful
Great writing style! I like it! Let us know about how the book’s coming along! 🙂
How sad. Good six for a random stab at the book! Those six sentences could stand alone quite happily, just as a good six should. I like it! 🙂